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| − | '''Alan is 1.85 meters high'''. He has brown coloured eyes and Black hair. '''His body construction is very muscular''' from working out, weighting 87 kgs. '''He has a scar on ''left'' eye were shrapnel is lodged and a partly artificial arm from the computer accident.''' It is a reminder of him to watch his back, and it made him feel like he had done something in his life . '''Also small wounds around his body from being bashed.''' '''Today he wears his Imperial Navy uniform, showing a rank of ''E-4''. He tries to keep his uniform brushed and cleaned at all times. He wears his 5th Imperial Fleet issue Armour to show what fleet he is in. '''
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| − | '''Ryan is 1.79 meters high''', just a little bit below his father, the Roche Family members were always tall people. He has a more or less brown coloured eyes and a brown/blond hair. '''His body construction is muscular''', weighting 82 kgs and he has strong arms and legs as all Corellians. After years of evolution and hard working in shipyards, most Corellians have their body almost engineered for factory working. That's how his father looks as well, but not as Ryan. '''He has a scar on his ''left'' leg caused when a mechanical part of a ship fell on Ryan.''' It was left from the surgery that saved his leg. '''Also small wounds on his chest and large scars on his back from the time in Prison.''' '''Today he wears his Imperial Navy uniform, showing a rank of ''E-7''''', and some medals he earned through the years. '''His uniform is brushed and cleaned at all times, except when he is on a mission. He wears his 5th Imperial Fleet issue Armour, to symbolize he is a part of one of the greatest fleets in the Navy.'''
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| − | Words in bold indicate what is exactly the same with modifications. This section is just too similar. I ignored the fact the article has a general idea of what I wrote as well. Seriously Smith, make your own article, this is ridiculous. --[[User:Ryan Roche|Ryan Roche]] 06:58, 9 August 2008 (CDT)
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Latest revision as of 13:00, 24 February 2009
Alan Smith rulz lol
Some points you should look into
- Well.. First of all, congrats on figuring out how to make an article. Second, you have a lot of things to redo. For example, a whole quote from the 5th's page is completely useless. As well as detailing on Operations you once had. I can't but not to notice that some parts of your bio resembles mine, but oh well. I have a "Operations" title in my article too, instead, I'm going to make it an RP and not just say what we did. Review your thread and fix what needs attention. --Ryan Roche 06:33, 31 July 2008 (CDT)
Okay
Okay will do im also adding some more links and gonna expand it a bit Thanks for the Help Ryan :)
